Chevening Application Essay
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Note on the Essay
This essay will be submitted to Chevening Scholarship program.
Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage with the Chevening community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your networking skills, and outline how you hope to use these skills in the future. (minimum word count: 50 words, maximum word count: 500 words)
It was not a coincident that I was trusted to lead alumni division in 50th Dies Natalis of [NAME OF PROGRAM], since I was known as The Event Organizer back then. This event was aimed to celebrate [NAME OF MAJOR]’s milestone within 50 years and I was in-charge to develop strategic planning for engaging alumni and strengthening their connection with [NAME OF PROGRAM] Program. In order to engage nearly 4.000 alumni in meaningful ways, my strategy was to divide my team into smaller team based on the class of alumni, since I believed that different approach was required for older and younger alumni. Younger alumni are more likely to get involved in the digital world, thus I used social media campaign as a bridge to deliver clear, creative and impactful message. While more traditional communication was applied to outreach our older alumni, such as warm phone call and personal meeting. This strategy had resulted in attendance of 75% of contacted alumni in the main event of [NAME OF EVENT].
In this event, we would also like our alumni to give back to our program by conducting sharing session. From alumni list, I identified potential guest speaker for this session and figured out ways to access them. At first, I doubted my networking skill, but then I realized that building network is less a matter of skill than of will. Not only is it useful for learning directly from individuals I approach, but also the benefits of growing my own authority are just as powerful. My approach focused on their giving on a cause and I finally managed to set an agreement with 9 alumni, exceeding our initial target of 5 alumni.
To build mutual relationship with alumni after the event had ended, I regularly shared newsletter and sent e-mail to share relevant information and resource. No matter whom I am trying to build a relationship with, I will always treat that person as a friend rather than a business contact. However, it was still beyond my expectation that right before my graduation, my current supervisor who also happened to be one of alumni that I used to approach offered first career opportunity to me. By first-hand experience, I learned that effective networking can be achieved by developing relationships with other people and providing mutual support and encouragement.
Networking is nothing without added value. When I become a Chevening scholar, I will be advanced in many ways therefore it would be my priority to give back to Chevening and society. As a scholar, my strategy will be to engage other scholars and alumni who share similar passions in energy and environment to find global solutions that can be applied locally. Utilizing support from impactful Chevening alumni network and my network (LIST OF NETWORK), I plan to initiate Energy101 class to educate youth about energy and environment. Lastly, as a Chevening Alumni, I will actively participate in Indonesian Chevening Alumni Association to strengthen relationships among the United Kingdom, alumni and scholars.
Review from Stefa Yuwiko – University of Newcastle Australia
Recipient of Vice-Chancellor’s Scholarship & Juris Doctor (JD) Scholarship for International Students
- However, please remember that you need to plan your work with the basic rule of making a paragraph (i.e. main sentence, supporting sentences and example in needed)
- Look at the keywords that are in the prompt and deserve some highlights:
Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage with the Chevening community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession.
It would be good if you can organise your ideas coherently (e.g. strong networking skills (1st paragraph), followed by engagement, influence and leading example in the next paragraph)
- I notice that the way you write it down isn’t an academic writing. Please make sure that it is okay for you to do that.
- I notice that you have too many passive sentences; it is always good to have more active sentences.
- Please check spelling errors as well with regard to single/plural noun.
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Hi I'm #Danstand and I'm applying for a Chevening Scholarship. I have drafted my essays and need you input to help me come out with a winning essay
1. Chevening is looking for people who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer
my first leadership accomplishments
I still remember it like it happened in the last 24hours, when my stepmother left to the forest early dawn to search for firewood without leaving me and my four siblings any food for breakfast. This happened somewhere 1999. We went to school on empty stomachs and when we returned from school my stepmother was still not back and everyone was starving and did not know what to do. Our dad left to work before my stepmother and so did not know what we were going through that day. I could not take the hunger any longer so I called my other siblings told them if we want food we have to work together and prepare our own food. I shared responsibilities, others were to gather millet straws so we could use for fire, others were to harvest pumpkin and fetch water and I looked for the ingredients to prepare a pumpkin meal. At the end I was able to put food on the table for my siblings and myself. This was my one of my leadership accomplishments even as a child at the age of ten.
Since then I have taken keen interest in problem solving and building my leadership skills by taking up leadership positions throughout my educational ladder, in church, societies and anywhere I find myself I try to influence, impart, transform, motivate and to contribute my quota to the growth of society. I do voluntary work with a Non-Governmental Organisation called Youth education and Transformation Network for Africa at my leisure time helping to educate the youth, teaching them good leadership and providing career guidance to secondary school leavers and on Sundays I help teach Sunday school children. Putting smiles on the faces of these little ones gives me inner satisfaction. Friends and closed relations know me as the man with all the time for others and no time for himself.
Many have given various and varied definitions of leadership but in my view leadership is service to others and that is what I am passionate about. My communication skills, time management, and selfless nature is seen in all my activities. I once used six days to organise a youth success seminar under the Youth Education and Transformation Network for Afriica organisation to the amazement of the founder and all the other executives raining praises on me.
Gaining the Chevening scholarship would help me learn and discover more on leadership and motivating others as it would expose me to world great leaders and other upcoming young great leader.
Dan, there is a one essay per thread policy for the free review at this forum. Therefore, a review can only be given for the topmost essay that you posted in this thread. The rest of your postings will be ignored by the other participants here or the admin will delete the rest of them. If you can, delete the other essays, if you can't, then ask the admin to do it for you. You risk being suspended from the forum if you do not fix that problem as soon as you can.
While I can see the importance of your perceived leadership experience at the age of 10, that is not the kind of leadership that the Chevening reviewers are looking for. They will be looking for more recent and profession related leadership skills and proof of influencing. Try to find a more recent leadership example to provide. All of the other applicants will be presenting highly technical and professional experiences in this field. If you present such as simple example of leadership and influence, most specially at such a young age, you will automatically be disqualified from the running in the scholarship considerations. Don't use the essay that you wrote as it will not serve its purpose. Develop a new essay that is more mature , profession related, and relevant in presentation.
Thank you very much. I'll rewrite and post for your review
Hello, please I have re written my essay and I want to post it for your review (an extra review will require an Urgent thread - please refer to the written notice on that, thanks. EF).
Hi I have rewritten my essay on leadership and want your input
Travis Bradberry defined leadership in his article published at entrepreneur.com on September 14, 2015 as "a process of social influence, which maximises the efforts of others toward the achievement of a greater good". This is me when it comes to leadership. Recently, June, 2017 to be precise, I led a team of twenty teenagers to a cultural competition against six other teams and we emerged winners in drama and second runner up in poetry.
Each team was to compose their own drama and poem on the effects of child marriage on girl child education. I was able to bring these teenagers of different ages, sex and different backgrounds to work together as a team to achieve a common goal. My communication skills, time management, and selfless nature is seen in all my activities and this reflected in our rehearsals which inspired the children to work together and also gave out their best performance. A time came when these children will even organise and rehearse in my absence because I was able to make each person feel important, needed and selfless. Hence when the announcement was made after the completion, that my team was first in the drama and second runner up in the poem recital, I was not surprised though happy. We were to now represent the circuit in the district competition.
I have always taken keen interest in problem solving [....] I always try to involve myself in voluntary work at my leisure time helping to educate the youth, teaching them [....]
Gaining the Chevening scholarship would [....]
I think, that it is better if you emphasize on your leadership experiences during high school, and how it has affected you. But overall, the second one is better.